Thursday, October 25, 2012

Poetry: on grammar

READ ALL THE FOLLOWING INSTRUCTIONS

Post your poems from your in-class exercise today. Do NOT use your tone word anywhere in your poem. 

You must post your poem by 8am tomorrow, Friday October 26. 

As/after poems are posted, comment on a post and guess what tone that poem is evoking (choose from the following tone word list). Each poem may only have ONE guess from ONE person. If a poem has more than one guess on it, only the first guess will be taken into consideration. This means that every poem should have one comment posted on it.

You must post your comment by 8am Monday October 29.


Tone words to choose from: 
Amiable
Reverent
Romantic
Whimsical
Audacious
Condemnatory
Passive
Condescending
Malicious
Sardonic
Taunting
Anxious
elegiac
Melancholy
Poignant
Apathetic
Didactic
Inquisitive
Nostalgic
Pretentious

40 comments:

  1. Running into battle
    Firing my bullets
    Killing the enemy

    I am a brave Marine, a shameless soldier, in the midst of a war.

    Beside my fearless brothers
    Between the ranks
    Underneath the Eastern sky
    Behind my rifle

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  2. Starting the grill,
    Countermanding a ground beef patty,
    Apportioning immaculate tomatoes,

    These are the steps, a “how to” guide, for making a burger.

    For success,
    The necessary directions,
    First,
    Second,
    Third,

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  3. Because of your irrevocable actions
    Your nonsensical deeds causing strife,
    To dream about overthrowing the Holy One
    To plan your fanciful thoughts of might
    To gain sway over the earth only
    To rot slowly in the dirt.
    You, egotist, are cursed to join in the eternal flames.

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    1. Lynn, this is incredible! I knew you could write liberally ;)

      CCCCCCCCCondemnatory Oh yeah!

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  4. Shuddering at the sight
    My face caries an image of fright.
    Feeling the ghastly sense
    Of the coming abhorrence.
    Hiding is not an option
    To rid myself of this repulsion.
    Watching the grotesque cockroach
    Bring on this mood of reproach.

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  5. Heartbreaking loss
    In the game of lacrosse
    Moving fast
    They were surpassed
    Throwing is easy
    the game was far from breezy
    Upsetting is hard
    they were charred

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  6. The chilly feeling wind proceeded the dimming light near the end
    A man nicely dressed and not knowing
    Only the preacher knows the man's ways

    The wooden box, sealed by the earth, strongly made

    Inside the box
    By a tree
    Within the grassy patch
    Between the turned dirt
    With one man going

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  7. The rain whipping against the house
    All windows pitch black
    A boy sad and alone

    The great storm, killer of dreams, continues its torrential downpour.

    Within reach
    About to see the magic
    But before his very eyes
    Without warning.
    But alas it it is true
    He'll go another day without seeing... Disney

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  8. Whenever I eat sardines
    They always thrive within my tummy:
    To illuminate of a sour stench
    To bask in their tin trench
    To slide down my esophagus aided by slime
    To have the balls to come back up time to time
    These are the thriving ways of the tin-housed fish.

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  10. The prank of cruelty,
    the fall is beauty to my eyes,
    the cry of pain,

    I wait, considering myself genius, to watch

    on tiptoe,
    by the edge,
    with amazing success.

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  11. Spiders, hideously hairy weavers of disruption, lurk and stalk
    grasping onto their minuscule importance
    trolling inside cluttered cabinets
    concealing their bulbous body
    attacking vulnerable bystanders
    gnawing on innocent victims

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  12. Ugh this is gonna suck...


    Roses are red
    Violets are....violet
    My heart is a muscle
    That pumps blood

    Then my heart said
    "I don't like to hustle
    I don't want a pet
    Now I'm upset!"

    "So what will you do?"
    I asked my blood-pump
    "I need a person!
    Not none
    Not some
    Just one!"

    So my heart set out
    He traveled far
    He found a person
    He fell in love

    He loved her deeply
    He wanted her bad
    He kissed her
    He hugged her
    He embraced her

    He found his nich
    He found his place
    She made him thump
    She made him beat

    He couldn't take it
    He asked her to be his wed
    His spouse
    His mate

    Then she said
    "you are a muscle
    You pump blood
    ew gross
    Stop squirting blood on me
    You are a freak
    I hate you"

    So he slept
    With dreams of love
    Dreams of her
    She gave him life
    She kept him up

    But she was not his
    So he woke up dead
    No beats
    No thumps

    I am dead.

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    1. This is awesome BUT you didn't do the right assignment! It was supposed to follow one of the grammatical formats from your grammar packet...

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  13. Thinking of what to do
    random thoughts ensue.
    Writing this poem late at night
    I just really am losing sight.
    Doing blogs so late
    my normal thoughts will dissipate.
    This coughing is getting really annoying,
    these random thoughts constantly deploying.

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  14. I really don't care about the student, the typical teenage stereotype
    Sleeping in class
    Sitting back and yawning
    loathing about homework,
    being sloth-like, unexcited, and laid-back,
    never stopping his inactivity.

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  15. Warm wind circled them.
    Friendly Birds above sang.
    Welcoming rays penetrated clouds.

    The earth trees, protrude through dirt, massively created

    Inside the heart
    By good judgment
    Between two friends
    With one charmed.

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  16. My journey, a parade of sweet summers and cozy winter memories
    comes to a bleak end.
    Winding along its merry course
    Converging with the timeline of others
    Slow dancing with the winds of change
    Arriving at an inevitable end
    Breaking down and wishing fare-well

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  17. This makes me sound very mean.... :(

    Being the person you are
    Won't get you very far.
    You are a disgrace
    To the entire human race.
    I'm far better than you
    And I look better, too.
    So, just go away.
    I've got nothing else to say.

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  18. This poem seems like it is condescending.

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  19. Because I know I did you wrong
    I express my remorse with my actions:
    to cry under my covers
    to silence my complaints under your authority
    to rise above my past actions
    to apologize under the sun while it still shines.
    this is how I show you my keen sense of regret, dear teacher.

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  20. Oh, sad life
    all of the strife.
    Poor me
    what shall I be.
    A broken machine?
    A sad flower?
    Nay, this be my final hour.

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